求助,帮我修改下英语作文
正式英语体罸叫做caning(鞭打)或是corporalpunishment(体罸),所以要把所有sticks/stickpunishments换上canings/corporalpunishments。
以下是我给你更正:
Nowadays,manypeoplethinkthatcorporalpunishmentsshouldbeusedinsupporttoeducatekids.First,theythinkthattosomeextent,caningisaneffectiveanddirectwayofeducatingyoungchildren(避免重复kids)becausethey(同样理由)aretooyoungtocontrolthemselves.Secondly,Itwouldbeagoodideathatparentsusecorporalpunishmentstosupporttherulestheymadesothattheycanleadtheirkids'lifetotherighttracks(後部几个字是我替你加上的,你可以自己考虑是否需要).Thirdly,theybelievewhattheyhavedonetothem,werejustshowingtheirlove.
Inmyopinion,Iwouldnotagreewithitatallandthinkthatcorporalpunishmentsineducationisjustashort-sightedidea.Everychidisuniqueintheirownway(各自有各自的特长,代替intheworld)andtheydon'tneedtohavethesameobjectivetobecome(或用turninto)thebestkid!
Iapproveofaproperpunishmentwhenkidsmademistakes,butitshouldn'tbetoomuchandalsomustcareaboutthekids'ownfeelings!
很希望我替你的修改能够令你满意。
需要注意的是的是:我多照原句,但亦有些字的删改、加或减。
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