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Withthedevelopmentoftechnology,Internetshoppingbecomesmoreandmorepopular.

ThereasonwhyInternetispopularwithisthatwithtechnologydeveloping.---thereasonwhyInternetissopopularisbecausethetechnologyhasdevelopedalot.

Especiallyonlineshoppingsofashionnowadays.---Onlineshoppinghasbecomeespeciallyfashionablenowadays

Becauseonlineshoppinghavesomenewfunctions.---hassomenewfeatures.

Herearesomeadvantages.---herearesomeadvantagesofonlineshopping.

Tobeginwith,itcanbringusmoreconvenience,weneednotgotothemalltobuysomethings,suchasclothesandshoes---Firstofall,itmakesourlifemuchmoreconvenientaswedon'tneedtogotothemalltoshopanymore.Wecanjustsitathomeandmakeorders.

Next,Itcostslessmoney,soweselectit.---Second,itcostslessmoneyandthat'swhyweuseit.

What’sworse,,wemightbuysomefakegoods.---However,therearealsosomebadthingsaboutonlineshopping.Forexample,wemightsometimesgetfakegoods.

So,somepeopleprefertogotothemallratherthanonlineshopping---Sosomepeopleprefertogoshoppinginthemallratherthanontheinternet.

Besides,someyoungpeopleinfavourofonlineshopping.---What'smore,Someyoungpeopleareaddictedtoonlineshoppingandrefusetogoout.

becomeaddictedin--becomeaddictedto

itwillinfluenceyourlife.---itwillhavebadinfluenceonyourlife.

Aslongasonlineshoppingproperly,itmakeslifebetter.---Aslongaspeoplecanmanageonlineshoppingproperly,itwillmakeourlivesmuchbetter.