托福作文怎么写

?从杭州到北京，高铁比飞机好。

此题有以下3种可能写法：

【A】高铁好，准点、方便、舒服。

【B】高铁好，准点、方便、舒服，而飞机很有可能晚点，来往机场时间长，座位狭小，久坐不舒服。

【C】诚然，飞机时间更短【高铁耗时长】;但是，高铁好，准点【飞机很有可能晚点】、方便【来往机场时间长】、舒服【飞机座位狭小，久坐不舒服】。

首先A这种写法没有对比，只是列举了高铁好，而并没有说明为什么高铁比飞机好。这是很多考生写对比型题目常犯的错误。B这种写法有对比，但是重复，即高铁的优点就是飞机的缺点。可取的是C这种写法，列举各自支持的理由，哪边理由更多更充分就支持哪边;而在一个段落内部，还可以对比。

托福作文怎么写？下面再看一篇高分学生考前练习作文。

Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?Yourjobhasmoreeffectonyourhappinessthanyoursociallifedoes.

【注：此文已更正语言错误，原文请见附录】

Nowadays,alotofyoungpeoplearehavingtroubledmindsofbalancingjobandsocialactivitiesreasonably.Frommyperspective,Iwouldsaythatoneshouldspendmoretimeonjobwhichensuresahappierlifethansociallifedoes.

Admittedly,sociallifeformsanindispensablepartofourlifebecausespendingtimetogatherwithfamilyandfriendsenablesustogetacloserrelationshipwiththem.Naturally,itwouldbringusanineffablesenseofhappiness.

However,thesalaryadecentjobcanofferseemstobemoreappealingtosomepeoplesinceitrepresentshigherlivingconditionandbettermateriallifewhichisobvioustosee.Forpeoplewhoaresimilartomyeldersister,theyseemtobemoresatisfiedwitharichandabundantlife.MyeldersisterMaggieisalifeinsuranceactuaryworkinginabiginsurancecompanywhichislocatedinNorthernCanada.Asaqualifiedactuarywithseven-yearlongworkingexperience,SisterMaggiereceiveslotsofmoneyastheresultsofherhardwork.Andconsequently,highsalaryfromworkenableshertoliveaprosperouslifeBesidespossessingtwoadjoiningvillaswhicharelocatedinthecentreofToronto,shecouldalsoeasilyaffordtopaytheexpenseofsendinghertwochildrentobestprivateschoolsandshewouldgotoTheQueen'sQuayshoppingmalleveryweekendtobuyallsortsofluxuryitems.Asforher,joyfulnesscomingfromdoingwhatevershelikesandbeingabletobuyanythingshewishescannotbereplacedbyanysocialgatherings.

Moreover,whilepeopleareworkingontheirjobs,contributionstheymaketothewholesocietyembodyasenseofself-accomplishment.Teachersoftenfindthemselvesworkingwithadelightfulmoodandhavingaccomplishmentsincetheyhelpkidstomoveaheadtriumphantly.Bypraisingastudentwhocameupwithanexcellentanswerintheclass,teacherscanmakestudentsfeelconfident,andconsequentlyitisindeedapleasureforteachersthemselvesaswell.Andafterteachersimpartknowledge,studentslearnandgetabetterunderstandingofallkindsofknowledge;teachersenjoyasatisfactorycareerlife.Sojobsmakeitalotmorepossibleforpeopletogainsatisfactionwiththemselvescomparedwithbusyingthemselvesdoingsocialactivities.

Ingeneral,theself-accomplishmentandarichandaffluentlifewhichjobofferscanbemoresignificantintheprocessofpursuingwell-being.

在分析这篇文章的时候，我们也把文章中的段首句抽出来。

However,thesalaryadecentjobcanofferseemstobemoreappealingtosomepeoplesinceitrepresentshigherlivingconditionandbettermateriallifewhichisobvioustosee.

Moreover,whilepeopleareworkingontheirjobs,contributionstheymaketothewholesocietyembodyasenseofself-accomplishment.

同样这两句话也起到提纲挈领的作用。

关于这篇文章，大家也还有几个疑问。首先让步段这么短，可以吗?这篇文章哪里体现对比?这篇的让步段很短，没有展开，但是起到了和后面两个段落对比的作用。而且在文章第三、四段末尾，也有对比。所以段落间有对比，而段落内部也有对比。

Maggie的例子是真实的么?一眼就能看出，Maggie的例子是假的。文章中提到公司所在地NorthernCanada和居住地Toronto是矛盾的，而且NorthernCanada位于北极圈内的不毛之地，应该改为SouthernCanada。这一点考官能看出来么?如果用人来看，一扫而过，还真不一定看得出来;如果是机器来看，应该不会判断。注意这个例子虽然是假的，但是写得非常具体，可以借鉴。